WHCsenryu...................
A STUDY OF TRUE SENRYU  (PART I):  IN SEARCH OF WHCSENRYU (2).........
Susumu Takiguchi, UK

 
 
 
In addition to the senryu works by WHCsenryu members, here I have tried, as part of the enquiry into ideal senryu for WHCsenryu, to explore my own senryu which would hopefully fall in line with the aims of our experiment. The followings are some examples.

 

 

 
(1)
 
the old salesman...
bowing to his customer
on the mobile phone
 
 
(2)
 
spiders just spin,
men spin lies...
 
 
(3)
 
On plagiarism:
 
These observations are on the recent abominable plagiarism drama looked at from a very different and satirical perspective, as we have been seeing it only from a single point of view, i.e. utter and total condemnation.
 
I condemn plagiarism just as strongly as anybody else, or more. As it is a theft of intellectual output and not of money or car, it is especially loathsome. So, basically I am completely in agreement with anybody else that we should condemn and repulse any plagiarist.
 
However, there are other ways in which one can view the same incident. Regrettably, haiku, as we know it at this particular juncture, does not have the scope or capacity to accommodate such observations as are displayed here for experimental purposes. If one were to present the following as haiku, or even as senryu but to haiku fora, one would be facing instant and unequivocal universal condemnation and uproar. I am only showing them here as part of our serious study to explore the boundaries of senryu. I am conscious of the risk I am taking but if anyone gets offended by these senryu please forgive me because I am presenting them on these grounds only and certainly not to offend.
 
I just want to show that senryu does provide a platform to write such things as haiku is not (yet) allowed to, or not able to deal with. Herein lies one of the great possibilities and potentials of senryu if only we wanted it.
 
 
plagiarist pinches
the planet's plenteous poems,
pipedreaming a potpourri
 
 
a watchful eye
catches the day robbery and
tells the world
 
 
poems plagiarised:
a little-known little form called
haiku from Japan
 
 
blatant plagiarism:
making the world-haijin's already
hot blood boil!
 
 
heated uproar!
find him, expose him, kill him,
in hot pursuit
 
 
in no time at all
plagiarist hunted down
like Saddam
 
 
weapons of mass destruction,
found everywhere in the cyberspace:
poetry websites and e-zines
 
 
Iraqi atrocities quite forgotten,
the eyes of the whole world focused
only on these little poems
 
 
the plagiarist detected
in a little corner of the planet...
overnight notoriety
 
 
named and shamed...
the plagiarist apparently
showing no remorse
 
 
not an Al Qaeda member,
the plagiarist transpires to be
one of us and among us
 
 
red faces, angry voices
embarrassed groans and hisses
fill this little planet of ours
 
 
and total outsiders
smelling the blood, demand the man
to be ostracised
 
 
high-minded poets,
now a blood-thirsty lynch mob...
thousands of miles away
 
 
you are either with us
or against us: an innocent
site owner capitulates
 
 
vulnerable site owners:
beware of plagiarists and troublemakers,
tighten your admission!
 
 
imitation = compliment...
plagiarism = the highest
possible accolade?
 
 
the plagiarist,
is he then the best judge
of our works?
 
 
looking closer at home,
not even plagiarised...
my poor little haiku
 
 
plagiarist—guilty,
copycat haiku poets—
not at all guilty
 
 
plagiarism:
a criminal offence—
copycat imitations:
praise-worthy acts
 
 
the plagiarist,
exposed and shame on him
heaped upon
 
 
at the unofficial court...
sentence meted out by
high-minded haiku judges
 
 
plagiarist punished
good and proper...
other haiku crimes?
 
 
what about
other haiku crimes?
what crimes?
 
*
 
(4)
 
nusubito wo trae-te mire ba waga ko nari
 
[old Japanese senryu, Shinsen-Inu-Tsukuba-shu, Yamazaki Sokan (~ c. 1540)]
 
a robber,
having apprehended him...
my own son!
 
 
* * *
 
On the London bomb attacks:
 
 
jibakusha wo sosa shitaraba doho yo
 
suicide bombers,
having investigated them...
our own countrymen!
 
 
(5)
 
a shoplifter, small beer
now a suicide bomber, a big-bang bigwig,
blasted himself to heaven
 
 
(6)
 
two minutes' silence...
standing alone at home; a strange feeling
as no one's watching
 
[At twelve noon to pay respect European-wide to the victims of the Double Seven]
 
 
(7)
 
ideology of evil...
a new over-simplified spin,
after WMD
 
*
 
ideology of evil...
a phrase as deadly as the people
it is directed to
 
*
 
evil is evil...
the only thing that can conquer it:
goodness of our heart
 
 
(8)
 
waiting for
The Haiku Moment
that never is
 
 
(9)
 
seeing unexpected fortune...
the widow wipes with his will
her crocodile tears
 
 
(10)
 
after the laugh
stern realities return...
comedy's trick
 
 
(11)
 
Jehovah's witness...
never found where
disasters strike
 
 
(12)
 
life, ephemeral
as morning dew,
goes on and on
 
[Allusion ('mojiri'=parody and/or 'hineri'=twist) to Issa's well-known haiku]
 
 
(13)
 
away from Japan
for so long that I eat rice
with a dessert spoon
 
[Dessert is called pudding in England, but I'm not talking about rice pudding]
 
 
(14)
 
the Bush pot
calling the Al Qaeda
kettle black

 

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